说明：本校月考题（三校联考）。学生写作问题比较多，抽空写篇指导。
阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。
Twenty years ago, I drove a taxi. Once, I was called at 3 a.m. to pick someone up. When I arrived, the building was completely dark except for one light in a window. Often, many drivers would just honk (按喇叭) once or twice, wait a short minute, then drive away.
But unless a real danger, I always went to the door to find the passenger. It might be someone who needed my assistance. Would I not want a driver to do the same if my mother or father had called for a taxi?
So I walked to the door and knocked. “Just a minute,” answered a weak and elderly voice. I could hear the sound of something being dragged across the floor. After a long pause, the door opened. A small woman in her 80s stood before me. By her side was a small suitcase. “Would you carry my bag out to the car?” she said. “I’d like a few moments alone. Then, if you could come back and help me? I’m not very strong.”
I took the suitcase to the cab, then returned to assist the woman. She took my arm, and we walked slowly toward the cab. She kept thanking me for my kindness. “It’s nothing,” I told her. “I just try to treat my passengers the way I would want my mother treated.”
“Oh, you’re such a good boy,” she said. When we got in the taxi, she gave me an address. Then she asked, “Could you drive through the downtown?”
“It’s not the shortest way,” I answered. “I don’t mind,” she said, “I’m in no hurry. I’m on my way to the nursing home.” I saw her eyes shining with tears. “I don’t have any family left,” she continued. “The doctor says I am too old to live alone.”
I quietly turned off the meter (计程器). “What road do you want me to take?” I asked. “First, take me to Sunrise Street. That’s where I was born.”
注意：
1. 续写词数应为150词左右；
2. 请按如下格式在答题卡的相应位置作答。
For hours, we drove through the city.______________________________________________
“How much do I owe you?” she asked, reaching for her purse.__________________________
指导：
线索：
时间：3 a.m.
人物（背景）：I drove a taxi. A small woman in her 80s stood before me. “I don’t have any family left,” she continued.
事件：I quietly turned off the meter (计程器).
主题：
Would I not want a driver to do the same if my mother or father had called for a taxi?
She kept thanking me for my kindness.
“I just try to treat my passengers the way I would want my mother treated.”
情节推测：
For hours, we drove through the city.
1. 她说话（照应人物背景线索：don’t have any family left）
2. 我聆听
3. 到地方
“How much do I owe you?” she asked, reaching for her purse.
4. 我回答：不收费（照应事件线索：I quietly turned off the meter）
5. 她反应：由惊奇到感激
6. 我反应：照应线索主题(I just try to treat my passengers the way I would want my mother treated.)
这次考试发现，很多学生觉得无话可说，在他们看来不就是说两句话的事情吗，怎么能写出那么多？
他们说的其实都没错，情节本身是很简单的，简单的情节才会给细节描写腾出空间的，下面一一说明：
For hours, we drove through the city.
1. 她的叙述（回忆过去）和她的神情
初稿：Suddenly, she said, “This is the place where I first my husband.”
我们提前预估，本文的对话会很多，如果续写都这样写，不是太好，可以用转述方式
润色：
Suddenly, she asked me to pull up near a peaceful square, where, as she told me in a gentle voice, she first met her husband. She sat on the back seat still, gazing at the square through a mist of tears for a moment, and then signaled me to move on.
技术手段：多角度丰富
声音：in a gentle voice
眼睛：gazing at the square through a mist of tears for a moment
手：and then signaled me to move on
动作：sat on the back seat still
2. 我的反应：聆听
初稿：All the way, I just listened attentively.
润色：
All the way, I just listened attentively as if I was a loyal audience to my mother who used to call up her good old days.
技术手段：加上as if...比喻手法。这种手法是比较好的，我记得有一次我女儿（小学三年级）给我说，我发现只要用比喻，作文就会被老师表扬。
同时也是为主题铺垫。
3. 到达目的地
初稿：Two hours later, we arrived at the gate of the nursing home at dawn.
润色：
技术手段：After what seemed...
After what seemed like a magical journey back to the past, we eventually arrived at the gate of the nursing home at dawn.
“How much do I owe you?” she asked, reaching for her purse.
4. 我的回答：不收费
初稿：
“Nothing,” I said, pointing at the meter.
润色：
“Nothing,” I said quickly, shrugging with a light laugh, winking at the meter.
技术手段：
副词：quickly
肩膀：shrugging
笑：with a light laugh
眼睛：winking at the meter
5. 她的反应：由惊奇到感激
初稿：She was very surprised and then moved. She said, Oh, you're such a good boy! Thank you.”
润色：
She looked at me with wide-open eyes. Then her shock slowly gave way to grateful understanding. “Oh, you're such a good boy! Thank you.” She held my hand tightly.
技术手段：
眼睛：looked at me with wide-open eyes
情感变化：her shock slowly gave way to grateful understanding
手：held my hand tightly
6. 我的反应：主题
“I just try to treat you the way I would want my mother treated,” I said softly.
润色：
“I just try to treat you the way I would want my mother treated,” I responded softly. Then I bent over and gave her a hug. A sudden warmth and happiness hit me like a gentle breeze wiping my face. And I knew it was the grace of kindness.
技术手段：
动作：bent over and gave her a hug
心情：A sudden warmth and happiness hit me like a gentle breeze wiping my face.
修辞：比喻I knew it was the grace of kindness.
完整：
For hours, we drove through the city.
Suddenly, she asked me topull upnear a peaceful square, where, as she told me in a gentle voice,she first met her husband. She sat on the back seat still, gazing at the square through a mist of tears for a moment, and then signaledme to move on. All the way, I just listened attentively as ifI was a loyal audience to my mother who used to call up her good old days.After what seemed likea magical journey back to the past, we eventually arrived at the gate of the nursing home at dawn.
“How much do I owe you?” she asked, reaching for her purse.
“Nothing,” I said quickly,shrugging with a light laugh, winking atthe meter. She looked at mewith wide-open eyes.Then her shock slowly gave way to grateful understanding. “Oh, you're such a good boy! Thank you.” She held my hand tightly. “I just try to treat you the way I would want my mother treated,” I responded softly. Then I bent over and gave her a hug. A sudden warmth and happiness hit melike a gentle breeze wiping my face. AndI knew it was the grace of kindness.
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